HOW'S MY DRIVING?

[paradisamods]

HOW'S MY DRIVING?

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[dubtalia.livejournal.com]

Fandom Name Here: Character Name - dubtalia
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here (http://dubtalia.livejournal.com/738.html) (optional)
Loss: Memories of the Holy Roman Empire
Canon Point: English Dub, sometime in World War 2, year unspecified
Notes: I haven't been as active as much, getting to tags and all for everyone. So I might need to improve on that. Or squeeze in time since I am going through a lot in my life. Things like driver's license, tests, turning 18, big changes for me. Other than that, I might be losing his voice since I am too excited to wanting the World Series being dubbed right now.
Specific Crit Requests: Anything at all! I would like some ways to improve as of now!

[gizmobunny.livejournal.com]

⚡ Nico childofhades: I love this kid dearly, and have no intentions of dropping him anytime in the foreseeable future, but I've been struggling with his voice recently. It's changed so much since he got here, and in part I think that's a natural shift – for the first time in his life he's around a bunch of people who would accept him even if they knew who his father was, and who seem genuinely interested in getting to know him, so I think that would make him come out of his shell a little. On the other hand, I don't want to stray too far from his roots. I know he's one of the lesser known characters here, but if anyone has any concrit I'd be very grateful.


❀ Hunnyboylolita: So having two snarky and negative characters is kind of starting to take a toll on my Hunny voice, and ever since I apped Alex he's started to get kind of weird. Too mechanical. So I'm doing a full canon review (anime and manga, this might take awhile) when I get the chance, and hopefully that will fix any problems.


☮ Alexdelincuente: I'm officially in love with playing Alex. That's really all I have to say. It's sometimes hard to match her snark and humor from canon, but I'm working on it. She really is a joy. I could always improve on her, though, so if you have any crit fire away!

[abravelikehero]

Disgaea 3: Almaz von Almandine Adamant - abravelikehero
Link to HMD: In the journal.
Loss: The ability to keep his internal monologue internal.
Canon Point: End of Chapter 4.
Notes: He spends most of his time in the game room being a loser.
Specific Crit Requests: I'm open to anything anyone has to say.

Trinity Blood: Pope Alessandro XVIII - shotapope
Link to HMD: In the journal.
Loss: Memories of Vaclav.
Canon Point: End of RAM 3
Notes: I'm planning on canon updating him soon to RAM 4. I also think I've been better about his activity lately and I want to try and get him out more. I know I never made a proper Carnevale post, I thought it might be too much with everything else going on but if people are interested I don't mind putting up a log still.
Specific Crit Requests: Anything you have to say, really I'm open to anything.

Touhou Project: Komachi Onozuka - hasnoneeds
Link to HMD: In the journal. (optional)
Loss: Her immortality (She doesn't know it yet)
Canon Point: Recent canon.
Notes: She's really knew and I feel a nervous about her so far. I have been playing her boss which I'm comfortable with, so this is a bit of a change for me. She also sort of came in the game during a difficult time.
Specific Crit Requests: Anything, anything at all.

The past few months my activity has been atrocious, and I was a little lost as to stuff that was going on. I feel a little more ontop of things now, and with a better idea of what's going on in the game I think my activity has been a lot better.

POSTING FOR BROKAY

[valerie]

	Arthas Menethil WARCRAFT Taken from after the fall of Quel'Thalas Lost the presence of Ner'zhul HMD Post		Malygos the Spellweaver WARCRAFT Taken from Day of the Dragon after Krasus asks for his aid Lost memories of the events leading to the destruction of the Well of Eternity
	Alice Kingsley ALICE IN WONDERLAND Taken from after the movie Lost the Jabberwocky's blood		Clare CLAYMORE Taken after the battle at Pieta Lost mental block to keep her from awakening

Ɨɴʋɨɴƈɨɓɭɛ: Only request is crit on Clare especially. kind of unsure on everyone at the moment
Ɨɴʋɨɴƈɨɓɭɛ: and shaky on how to get Alice a bit more...out there.

Emily's People

[enjoythe_ride]

Supernatural: Bela Talbot - enjoythe_ride
Loss: Memories of selling her soul.
Canon Point: 315: Time is on my Side
Time in Castle: 2 years, 4 months.

Supernatural: Sam Winchester - imnot_likeyou
Loss: His demon blood abilities and Lucifer.
Canon Point: 522: Swan Song
Time in Castle: 2 years, 2 months

Bones: Lance Sweets - zone_of_truth
Loss: Zack's confession in 412: The Perfect Pieces in the Purple Pond.
Canon Point: 601: The Mastadon in the Room
Time in Castle: 2 years, 1 month

Dark Angel: Max Guevara - whatialways_do
Loss: Memories of Ames White
Canon Point: 222: Freak Nation
Time in Castle: 1 year, 7 months

Buffyverse: Cordelia Chase - letsbe_clear
Loss: Memories of Connor.
Canon Point: 512: You're Welcome
Time in Castle: 1 year, 2 months

Leverage: Sophie Devereaux - wereall_addicts
Loss: Her ability to do accents.
Canon Point: 315: The San Lorenzo Job
Time in Castle: 1 year and change

White Collar: Neal Caffrey - classic_ratpack
Loss: His ability to leave the castle without a designated escort.
Canon Point: 209: Point Blank
Time in Castle: 3 months

I know my activity in February was lacking, and I'm still on hiatus, but I wanted to get this up there anyway. Also, my notifs are still incredibly on the fritz so if there's something important that it seems like I dropped and I shouldn't have please poke me about it? I went through all my LJ inboxes yesterday, but that doesn't guarantee that I actually caught the tag.

Other than that -- I will take whatever you want to throw at me.

[stellennium.livejournal.com]

Boktai
Django + heliotroping
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here (http://heliotroping.livejournal.com/995.html)
Loss: Ability to Trance
Canon Point: Post Shinbok, worst ending
Date Arrived: 12/1/06
Notes: He has some more unfortunate triggers running around, so he'll be different than he has been before (more angsty, violent, angry, etc), especially since he's afraid he didn't free his father like he thought. He'll get over that eventually.
Specific Crit Requests: Since there's not much canon to work with (KOJIMA WORK ON THIS GOD DAMN IT) Some of that mentioned above might be a sort of munfudge reaction. He was so depressed and barely had time to mourn, so I think it's only natural that now that he does have that time, he's conflicted and angry. Think differently? It would be nice to elaborate :3

Pokemon Adventures
Gold + billiardsplz
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post here (http://billiardsplz.livejournal.com/269.html)
Loss: Ability to touch eggs
Canon Point: Right before his match against Sapphire at the end of the Emerald arc
Date Arrived: 11/28/09
Specific Crit Requests: I've been getting more confident with him, but I feel I'm still a little shakey again.

[continuing.livejournal.com]

► Asuka, as always, is a difficult one to get out there and get involved with people. I'm trying to get her more reasons to care about the castle and (some of) its residents. Recently, she's been becoming kind of friendly with Emil, so I'd like to get some more CR like that. THIS IS MY MISSION.

► Steph... Steph, I keep saying I'm going to bump her, and I WILL. I'm going to see what goes down in the issue of Supergirl this month that she appears in, then decide. If her role in that isn't wrapped up nicely, I'll probably just bump her to end of Batgirl #16.

► Teresa has an adult Clare! And a Miria! She's been adjusting to that, so I need to get her to define her role in this Riful madness. She's technically the highest rank of the current Claymores in Paradisa, and the one here longest, but not the strongest when it comes to leadership qualities.

State of the Characters aside, I'm sorry for terrible tagging lately. All of my accounts have been suffering during this LJ crap, AND my spring semester started this month. If I happened to drop any threads you want to continue, feel free to drop me a line any time and I'd be happy to :)

html fail, sorry!

[writesonthesly.livejournal.com]

[oathprotector.livejournal.com]

Kingdom Hearts: Riku - oathprotector


I've been nonexistent lately, with being sick, etc., and may be hiatusing very very soon, but I do want crit. Something to work on for when I come back.

[freila.livejournal.com]

PERSONA 2: INNOCENT SIN: Tatsuya Suou - oracleof
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here (http://oracleof.livejournal.com/621.html) (optional)
Loss: His memories of how he got his lighter.
Canon Point: After collecting the 4 crystal skulls
Notes: He hasn't been here long, so I'm still working on stuff! Right now he's pretty focused on purposely not thinking about his friends back home, out of fear that it might bring them here if he does.
Specific Crit Requests: My main worry is that because he's quiet and reserved, he may not be interesting to tag or I may not be giving you enough to respond to. I'm usually pretty good with giving the people I thread with stuff to bounce off of when I'm playing others, but with him I'm unsure what the good balance is between how quiet he is and how easy it is for people to talk to him at all. Anything else would be appreciated too, whether it's here or on my post!

[marionttepurple.livejournal.com]

BlazBlue: Carl Clover - marionttepurple
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here (http://marionttepurple.livejournal.com/345.html)
Loss: memory of his mother's original appearance
Canon Point: after his True Ending in Continuum Shift.
Notes: Sorry about slow replies ;; schoolwork was more than I expected, and the wonky notifs are not helping.
Specific Crit Requests: Anything goes. I'm afraid I'm making him too nice here, or that he's not crazy enough. Or paranoid enough. And maybe a bit shaky with him too, seeing as I haven't canon reviewed in a long time.

MegaMan: Luna Shirogane - lunarlocks
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here (http://lunarlocks.livejournal.com/712.html)
Loss: her mother's handkerchief
Canon Point: before Subaru goes to fight King/Crimson Dragon
Notes: Same as above.
Specific Crit Requests: Anything goes, too. Still shaky on her voice as well.

[deadelfwalking.livejournal.com]

World of Warcraft: Wrath of the Lich King: Koltira Deathweaver - deadelfwalking
Link to HMD: HMD (http://deadelfwalking.livejournal.com/1828.html?mode=reply)
Loss: Memories of Faltora, his little brother
Canon Point: As abom hooks are yanking him to the UC
Notes:Koltira's just his usual frustrated self at the moment. Presently he's realizing how people only ever touch him when the castle straight up forces them to do so :V
Specific Crit Requests: I feel like this guy still needs to branch out more.

Tron: Legacy: Quorra - lastisocorn
Link to HMD: HMD (http://lastisocorn.livejournal.com/980.html?mode=reply)
Loss: Memories of Sam Flynn
Canon Point: Just before the final confrontation with Clu
Notes: NOTHING EXCEPT THAT I AM SUPER NERVOUS WITH HER ...
Specific Crit Requests: UM ... Quorra is basically, as her actress described her, 'naive but self-assured'. I'm trying to be sure that comes through. She has a lot of abstract knowledge regarding many concepts, because she's very well-read, but she's not as well-versed in modern slang / figures of speech etc. She's childlike, but not childish. It's all very hard to balance :V

wow this one is long

[thano.livejournal.com]

mmm_paradise

☛ has been here for 2.5 years
☛ thinking about adding on a supernatural/paranormal vulnerability. it really should have been there all along. :(
☛ no real thoughts, will continue truckin' :|b

kindnessing

☛ has been here for 2 years
☛ might be adding on more consequences of experimenting with his dark spore? let me know if you need me to expand.
☛ doop doop doop truckin' along.

givingchase

☛ has been here for 1 year
☛ should be more active. way more active. :/!!!
☛ frains frains blah blah

hardonic

☛ has been here 6 months-ish
☛ already switched to non-font text during action logs, but will stick to text for the journal.
☛ voice/characterization issues errrrrrwhere. if you've got something to point out, let me know.

in general:

☛ clarity issues! i have been getting several complaints about joshua and dave being very difficult to talk to - they're both the type to go off on impenetrable tangents without really caring if the other person understands them. more than once i have had people im me asking what they're talking about or telling me they spent forever looking something they said up. i have been thinking about adding links to more salient details the reader should know to understand the basic gist of their spiel, but i want to know what you guys think.
☛ HOMESTUCK CAST: vis a vis the text permissions post - should i be putting it up monthly or bimonthly (as in once every two months, derp)? I was already thinking about putting it up again tomorrow in light of current events and the recent cast expansion. :D
☛ MY ACTIVITY IS SHIT, I SHOULD DROP A CHARACTER, I AM THINKING ABOUT IT. :(b

[inksmears]

Persona 4: Souji Seta - allthelinks
Link to HMD: HMD
Loss: Memories of the Velvet Room
Canon Point: Post-True Ending
Notes: I've been slacking with him. ;~; I need to get him out there more.
Specific Crit Requests: Nope. Hit me with anything that you think needs addressed.

Persona 4: Jade Harley - frostandfrogs
Link to HMD: HMD
Loss: Memories of Bec
Canon Point: Shortly after turning off the Fourth Wall
Notes: She wants to be friends with everyone!! She'll probably start hanging out in the greenhouse a lot too.
Specific Crit Requests: Nope. Hit me with anything that you think needs addressed.

[orz-woeisme.livejournal.com]

[pullsheavendown.livejournal.com]

Still on hiatus so he hasn't done much in a couple weeks, but:

Kingdom Hearts: Roxas - pullsheavendown
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here (http://pullsheavendown.livejournal.com/1099.html)
Loss: Memories of the Twilight Town kids
Canon Point: Day 171 of 358/2 Days
Notes: :|a
Specific Crit Requests: None really.

[cloakand_danger]

Tales of Symphonia: Yuan Ka-Fai - cloakand_danger
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here
Loss: Angelic powers
Canon Point: Just after the Scene At Altessa's (game canon only)
Notes: Been here 3+ years, so he's changed quite a bit in that time. Also, I totally plan to get a post up about Joshua/the Peace Patrol sometime today or tomorrow, I just got bit by a lack-of-motivation bug.
Specific Crit Requests: I can't think of anything in particular...

[lord-wizard.livejournal.com]

Doctrine of Labyrinths: Felix Harrowgate - lord_wizard
Loss: The Syblline
Canon Point: Between book 3 and 4
Notes: Time in Paradisa - 4 months. He's pretty active still, and I am no where near done with the Chimera stuff. I want to prod the members more, but don't want to be invasive.
Specific Crit Requests:
Felix is a very complex character. So complex that even I still can't comprehend a lot of what he does in canon. I've come to the realization that the information I provided for his personality in his app is, while still true, not necessarily accurate. And as the author herself has said, the only thing that really saves Felix from being a total Mary Sue is that he's an asshole. And you might have noticed he doesn't come off this way. Too me though, this isn't entirely true, and also it's hard to be an asshole to people you don't know, especially when he also badly wants people to like him, and it's a delicate balance to strike. So I'm slowly building up his CR circle so I promptly break it down (or try to. People here are stubborn). Given that info, or if ANYONE knows his canon and has crit on how I play Felix, please let me know.

[succubitch]

Angel the Series: Lilah Morgan- buryyoualive
Loss: If someone asks her about her evil plots, she will be compelled to spill the beans about them.
Canon Point: Post 4x01, "Deep Down"
Notes: I know I need to get her out and interacting outside of her canonmates (especially Wesley...) a little more. Part of this was my issue, as I was feeling iffy on her voice at first, but as I play her more, I've definitely grown more comfortable, so hopefully that'll change. Specifically, I'd like her to meet more like minded people she could possibly plot with..as she's a little lost, direction wise, without Wolfram and Hart to rely on.
Specific Crit Requests: Anything!

[autophoenix.livejournal.com]

[bedninja]

Persona 3: Pharos - bedninja
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here
Loss: His ability to "know death".
Canon Point: November 4th, just after his departure.
Notes: I know I kind of disappeared for a little while there, and I'm sorry about that; but I'm back into things now and don't plan to let that happen again!
Specific Crit Requests: Anything and everything! I... tend to use a lot of headcanon with this kid, so if you've had any problems with this in the past or anything else, please let me know!

Arden's Chars

[dancinpenguins]

	Series | Smallville Canon Point | 10x11 Loss | Memories of Chloe Sullivan (her cousin) HMD Post | Here, screened + anon available Use for ANY character :3 Time in Paradisa | 6 months Wiki Page | Here Character Relations Chart | Very in need of updating, but here Concerns | I would love feedback on the Isis plot (in terms of IC & OOC) I refrained from giving her a huge role in the Slenderman research b/c I want to be careful not to let her dominate the research scene, especially on topics she's not knowledgeable about. I'm hoping this didn't come off as her not getting very involved - I tried to strike a balance, but I'm not sure I succeeded this time. Also, how am I doing on maintaining CR with her? Lois has a wide CR net, and I want to make sure your character is getting the attention they think they deserve if they're close to her. LOIS LANE | loisfuckinglane
	Canon | Star Wars Canon Point | End of The Empire Strikes Back Loss | Inconvenient bouts of honesty Time in Paradisa | 3 months Wiki Page | Here Character Relations Chart | Here Concerns | If Han's felt a little sparse, it's for 2 primary reasons: 1) I've still been backlogging with him all the way back to his 2nd post, keeping some threads going for a couple months even. 2) I've had a hard time figuring out what to do with him. I feel generally comfortable with his voice now (feel free to disagree if you don't feel it's IC!), but I have a difficult time figuring out what to have him do with his time here. :( I'm really trying to work at it, as I don't want to drop him, so hopefully building him more CR will help...? HAN SOLO | hanfreakingsolo
	Canon | X-Men films Canon Point | Directly after Phoenix throws him into a wall in X3 Loss | Memories of Rogue Time in Paradisa | Almost 2 weeks Wiki Page | Here Character Relations Chart | Here Concerns | Logan's a brand new voice for me, so more than anything, I'd appreciate feedback on his voice/whether his actions are IC/etc. It's a game largely based around conversations with others, and Logan's a man of few words, so I want to make sure I'm not going overboard to compensate. Also, feedback on canonmate interaction thus far would be great. They're from a different universe but I still want Logan's reactions to them to make sense. He's been focused lately on getting to know the X-kids and assess their situation: and he's not above making things messy on purpose in order to do so. LOGAN / "WOLVERINE" | slicesanddices

[arcade-god.livejournal.com]

TRON: Kevin Flynn - arcade_god
Link to HMD: HMD (http://arcade-god.livejournal.com/799.html)
Loss: his identity disc
Canon Point: a few cycles after CLU's betrayal
Notes: Brand new, so I dunno if anybody actually has anything to say at this point. So far I haven't branched out much, as a new player, but I hope to take care of that in the future.
Specific Crit Requests: Pretty much anything. I've seen plenty of badly-played Flynns around, so it would be nice to know if I have a decent grasp of his (pre-Legacy) voice.

[hierarchic.livejournal.com]

OKAY. so, i won’t lie, i have been super uncomfortable with myself in RP right now. i’m not even sure where to start. i took such a long hiatus and now find myself kind of lost getting back into the game. i’ve also been getting sick on and off lately. my drive for tagging is up and down, and i don’t feel i have a grasp on anyone’s voices anymore. i feel the most confident in akihiko but i do have a billion questions to pose soooo...!

akihiko: how has he been since he came back to life? i had him killed because i wanted to play around with death in paradisa and bring to light the more serious nature of it. so far, he hasn’t come to admit anything but it’s something i’m working on and hopefully will do right! but is he too angry, angsty... neither of those? am i over playing this? i don’t want him to just forget about the fact he died and went through two weeks of being stuck in freaky darkness. ALSO! aha, is his relationship with claire moving too fast? i’ve never played out a cross-fandom relationship OH GOD SEND HELP.

kate: at a loss with her. with her book being delayed AGAIN, my muse sort of plummeted. need to work on tagging out with her more though she’s currently taking a break from the castle. she’ll be back in a week, i promise. i’ll be doing another canon review for her, hopefully to keep myself going because i really do love this character.

karen: needs to tag out DIRELY. i apologize for the major fail on her part.

uru: oh boy. my longest and favourite muse and i haven’t a clue what to do with her anymore. coming up with posts is hard for her and as you can see by my really slow tags with her, her voice is fading. doing a canon review for her too because i would hate to drop her. i love her CR, i love her interactions and her growth in paradisa. she’s really... sad lately, it’s not right. i’ve already made some plans with people so she can blow off steam but i’m worried she’s done with. she’s just kind of THERE and at the same time, i’m so sick of how dramatic she’s been. i really need help with her, this isn’t the same girl anymore. i wanted her to mature and still maintain her optimism and happiness but i royally fucked up. D8 she also hasn’t been my main focus lately, so i haven’t been trying to fix the issues properly.

derp. TL;DR. :( i’m trying to crawl out of this lame rut. you guys know how this goes, crit, concerns, plotting ideas all go here. thank you in advance!

[supergenes.livejournal.com]

I know I haven't been really active/done anything with Kell yet, but I'm hoping to change that soon! Other than that... I don't have much to say. Have at.