HOW'S MY DRIVING?

[paradisamods]

HOW'S MY DRIVING?

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[paradisamods]

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mine was not pretty enough

[stick.livejournal.com]

- exanimatus
HMD: Here! (http://exanimatus.livejournal.com/1273.html)
Loss: His memories of Sayuka.
Canon Point: Post-anime, post-manga, somewhere in the middle of those wacky light novels.
Notes: He's been here for almost three years and is in kind of a weird place right now.
Crit Requests: I have a bad habit of taking headcanon and running with it. So, as usual, if you think anything seems off or he did something that seemed really weird and uncharacteristic, let me know!

- raretype
HMD: Here! (http://raretype.livejournal.com/980.html)
Loss: Her memories of Granny Liza and her gang.
Canon Point: Right before the hideous child laboratory flashback of terror.
Crit Request: I feel like she fell into the "Paradisa routine" really quickly. I think she also learned how to write passingly pretty fast compared to the last time. Part of it can be justified, but part of it's also because I've played her here twice already, haaa. Thoughts?

And then there is me: I've been trying to get both of my characters out there a little more; I'm not sure if it shows, especially since these last couple of weeks have been murder (I'm gearing up for finals, and all). As always, if you've got anything to say about my playing or how I handle things, you're totally welcome to bring it up here.

[todd-fan.livejournal.com]

I’ve got nothing specific to ask this time around, if you’ve noticed anything at all I need to address with my characters, or about me as a player or helper please do say so.

| Good Omens | onlyanapple | HMD (http://onlyanapple.livejournal.com/4265.html)
Loss: Ability to manifest things
Time in Paradisa: 2 years 4 months

| Angel | mysticalvender | HMD (http://mysticalvender.livejournal.com/2138.html)
Loss: Memories of Lindsey McDonald
Time in Paradisa: 2 years 3 months

| Red vs Blue | girly_laps | HMD (http://girly-laps.livejournal.com/357.html)
Loss: Ability to have sex
Time in Paradisa: 1 year 2 months

| Red Dead Redemption | mademyownpath | HMD (http://mademyownpath.livejournal.com/728.html)
Loss: Ability to use a lasso
Time in Paradisa: 9 months

| Discworld | mal_addict | HMD (http://mal-addict.livejournal.com/998.html)
Loss: Sword
Time in Paradisa: 7 months

| Marvel | blorks | HMD (http://blorks.livejournal.com/1093.html)
Loss: Memories of Lila Cheeney
Time in Paradisa: 2 months

Any passing comments for Wybie why_born are also welcome.

[superheroine]

halfgoddess	clarklike	heirdom
2y During fight with SBP Lost memories of Artemis	2y 5m Between Salvation/Lazarus Lost memories of adopted father	1y 4m Pre-paralyzation Lost sword skills

Okay let me just ramble for a moment.

I've been really disappointed in my own activity and participation in this game as of late. Personal life has been busy, yes, but for the amount of hours I spend online, I don't feel my own activity has met my own expectations. My characters need to get out more -- especially Cassie. I need to socialize with other players more, because I feel like I'm in a self-made bubble. I need to stop overworking myself OOC and underworking myself IC.

So I will be trying to work on that, because I miss the days where I was a really good reliable player who had more time to play out character story-lines and stuff. I plan to work on that by:

a) not spreading myself thin on moderating stuff anymore,
b) taking a hiatus from running major plots (specifically ones with a heavy narrative that require lots of ongoing TLC) because I am burned out as hell.
c) possibly dropping Cassie? I've been hemming and hawing over this for months, going on bursts where I feel like I'm totally on top of things and then slipping back down to feeling like I just need to rip off the band-aid and drop her. Then I think a canon-update might revitalize things a bit. Then I remember the CR I have with her and the CR I want to make and I don't know.
d) commenting around more.
e) plotting more character stuff.

And things.

Where do I need improvement? Tagging around? Backtagging? Establishing more/deeper CR?

[tehoniongirl.livejournal.com]

[I have company coming over tonight, so I might be scarce while I get ready for that, but I will tag around...either before they get here or tomorrow. <3]

[anzu-less.livejournal.com]

Notes
● Colette: I'm ... actually feeling in a tiny bit of a rut with her. Is she coming off as boring? I'm afraid that I'm just rinsing and repeating her saying all the same things over and over again, but I can't tell because I see every conversation she ever has ever. Just let me know if she's way too flat.
● Maya: Feeling good, but going to be feeling a little depressed for a while. It'll be a different Maya, so let me know if she still sounds right.
● Nanako: I feel good with her, and just know that she is on drama ban for... a really long time, haha. ONLY SUNSHINE AND RAINBOWS FOR THIS GIRL
● Yukari: I'm going to watch some cutscenes and make sure that her voice is right. I'm sorry she's been so quiet, I promise she'll get out there!
● Um, and more for a note about myself, I'm sorry that I'm the slowest tagger in the world. I know that threads with me can take forever, and I'm really trying hard to get better. So anyway, I'm sorry, I'm trying to get better, and you guys are the best for putting up with me ♥

Posting for Ena

[todd-fan.livejournal.com]

Name:Ukitake Jyuushiro
Fandom Bleach
Journal: thirteenth
Loss: Bankai
Time in Paradisa: 1 year, 6 month
Personal HMD: Here (http://thirteenth.livejournal.com/2052.html)
Notes: I've had Ukitake the longest now, and he's still my favourite to play. But I'm aware he's also one of my weaker ones, characterization wise, so please feel free to point out ways of improving that.

Name: Tamaki Suoh
Fandom Ouran High School Host Club
Journal: daddyhost
Loss: His stuffed teddy bear - Beary
Time in Paradisa: 11 months
Personal HMD: Here (http://daddyhost.livejournal.com/1009.html)
Notes: Any ideas on how to improve the Host Club are welcome, as well!

Name:Aziraphale
Fandom: Good Omens
Journal: madetothwart
Loss: The ability to wear suits
Time in Paradisa: 9 months
Personal HMD: Here (http://madetothwart.livejournal.com/857.html)
Notes: Nothing specific. But, as always, all crit is welcomed.

Name: Cain Knightlord
Fandom: Trinity Blood
Journal: derpish
Loss: Cannot eat fish any longer, it gives him an allergic reaction
Time in Paradisa: 5 months
Personal HMD: Here (http://derpish.livejournal.com/993.html)
Notes: Cain is Mars era, from the novels.

Name: Sir Integra Fairbrook Wingates Hellsing
Fandom: Hellsing
Journal: integrability
Loss: Memories of her father's face and voice
Time in Paradisa: 2 months
Personal HMD: Here (http://integrability.livejournal.com/1149.html)
Notes: I'm really enjoying Integra at the moment, but any crit is welcome.

Name: Unit HC IIIX Hercules Tres Iqus
Fandom: Trinity Blood
Journal: machineish
Loss: His guns
Time in Paradisa: 3 weeks
Personal HMD: Here (http://machineish.livejournal.com/522.html)
Notes: Back to Paradisa, but still new this time around.

ADDITIONAL: Is there anything you would like to crit me on as a player? I'm trying to work on my backtagging, but what more can I do to improve on it? Anything you want!

[orgrimmar.livejournal.com]

No specific character needs this time around. The only thing I can really ask for at this point is honest critique on my portrayal of Vriska, as she is my newest muse from my newest fandom. Not going to lie, this fandom is intimidating, people!

While I am well aware those I speak to on the plurk seem to have a generally favorable opinion of how I handle her, I would like to know what I need to focus on, because I definitely know there is room for improvement. I think I will ease my way through another canon review soon...

But honestly, though? Hit me with your best shot! For anyone! ::::)

[arrowonthewind.livejournal.com]

➹Alleria. There has been an increase in her bitchiness/craziness since Turalyon left, but I'd like to know if anybody thinks I'm overdoing it. (in b4 WHAT OVERDO WINDRUNNER BITCHINESS ARE YOU CRAZY)

☠Brock. Nothing specific!

✟Hellboy. He just got here and I haven't really tagged him around yet, but if anybody has crit so far, I'll take it!

☂Sera. Nothing specific!

✎Odell. Non-character-specific crit is welcomed as well! I know for the past few weeks I've been a little lax in tagging around; I think I'm starting to get burned out a little bit. I will fix this, I swear!

[truthin-bones.livejournal.com]

Fandom Name Here: Temperance Brennan - truthin_bones
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here (http://http://truthin-bones.livejournal.com/2347.html) (optional)
Loss: Ability to effectively communicate archaeology/cultural anthropology factoids.
Canon Point: A couple of days after the S5 finale.
Notes: Um, nothing I can think of?
Specific Crit Requests: Any, please.

[sworn]

	Vereesa Windrunner WARCRAFT Post-Fall of the Lich King Lost her pearl dagger HMD Post		Parker LEVERAGE Post-season two Lost ability to pick locks HMD Post		Nancy Downs THE CRAFT Taken from just before Sarah binds her Lost the names and faces of her witch coven HMD Post
	Merlin MERLIN Taken from after 3.04, "Gwaine" Lost memories of Freya HMD Post		Nepeta Leijon MSPA: HOMESTUCK Taken from [S] Seek the Highbl00d Lost memories of her lusus HMD Post/Trolltext purrmissions

I would like some input on Nepeta, as she's my newest muse and I've only recently gotten into her canon. She's only made one post so far but AM I DOING IT RIGHT? Anything seem off? Too many cat puns or not enough? I am all kitty ears.

I am actually feeling very solid about my lineup this time around, but as always, I accept any and all critique you have for me. LAY IT ON ME.

[lyntergalactic]

• Bruce Wayne DCAU loss: aim hmd

• Kara Zor-El DCU loss: lana lang hmd

NOTES: • Last HMD it was mentioned that Bruce was being maybe a little too nice. How am I doing with that one? Is it better, is it still something I need to work on?
• Similarly, on the HMD meme not related to the game, an anon noticed I have a tendency to canon drop facts into threads a lot with Kara, so I've been trying to catch when I do this. How's it going?
• Thiiiiinking of canon-bumping Kara soon because I'm pretty sure I've gotten all the character development I can wring out of her whole post-New Krypton (and then post-Para death) grief and guilt, which was the only thing stopping me from bumping her to awesome events. (It would also help push her into a better place mentally as;dfsjdlfksd) Thoughts?

[echivoc.livejournal.com]

D.GRAY-MAN ⇒ Cross Marian @ echivoc
CANON POINT ⇒ Chapter 168, page 14
LOSS ⇒ Memories & feelings of Anita
I know I have been pretty scarce lately, due to school and some personal stuff, but with Spring Break having started, I do hope to get back into the swing of things as much as possible. I did express interest in changing Cross's permaloss, but thanks to the several recent DGM chapters showing a potential re-emergence of him, I am putting that change on indefinite hold. Hopefully it will happen before the summer is over, if I am that lucky to see him appear that fast sob. ;;

I do not really have any specific requests, so whatever you have on your mind, feel free to express it!

[devotedsister.livejournal.com]

Daredevil-Elektra movies: Elektra Natchios - [Bad username or site: @ livejournal.com]
Link to HMD: Can be found in Elektra's journal.
Loss: Ability to resurrect the dead
Canon Point: Post Elektra movie
Notes: I'm feeling pretty good about her. It's been over a year since I took her up and I feel like I've really improved on her since then. I may want to give her a loss to bump her back to Daredevil canon in the next month or so but, for now I have no real plans for her.
Specific Crit Requests: Uh... whatever you can think of?

Although I dropped Shahrazad a day or so ago if you anything to say about her please feel free to do so. I do intend to play her in other games in the future so I'd appreciate the input.

Edit
Got any advice for me as a player?

[walkinthruwalls]

Wilhelmina Harker ( League of Extraordinary Gentlemen ) → possiblycantdie | HMD
Loss: Her chemistry abilities
Time In Paradisa: 3 weeks 1 day

Katherine Anne "Kitty" Pryde ( X-Men ) → walkinthruwalls | HMD
Loss: Ice skating
Time In Paradisa: Less than an hour?

Looking for?: Erm... anything really. I'm still new so... give me anything. Posting enough? Too much? Are you sick of me? Even Kitty's characterisation is a go because... nervous. Anything. :]

[custodismundi.livejournal.com]

Trinity Blood: Abel Nightroad - custodismundi
Link to HMD: on journal /LAZY BASTARD
Loss: Lilith's image
Canon Point: chapter 46, when Esther is falling from the helicopter onoes
Notes: Abel has... gone through a lot AAH. Recent months have been extremely hard on him, and I'm trying to find a rational way for him to work through it without expounding too much emo on the public at large. (Hence, most of his hermit-esque angsting is handwaved or takes place in closed logs/threads etc, and he's been continuing to behave normally, which is typical of him to do!). I'm hoping to fix some of this (get rid of the additional nanomachines, primarily, since I've been handwaving everything in relation to them anyway AAH) through a canon bump sometime soon! I think he'll be much happier for it and given some time away from Paradisa to separate himself from the recent-ness of the Slenderman fiasco and Cain's loss. Until then, he'll probably keep trying to keep his whipped puppy faces behind closed doors like... a fail idek flkjsdf and show a cheerful face. I AM SO WORRIED about the balance between his derp/srs, especially considering all the stress the environment has dumped on him lately. If you have any resolutions or advice, or any suggestions, please -- I'm totally all ears! /fears
Specific Crit Requests: As stated above, I'd love any feedback on the best way to handle reactions to the fallout of a general fail few months.

Hellsing: Walter C. Dornez - johnbulls
Link to HMD: on journal /STILL A LAZY BASTARD
Loss: Memories of the "bargain" made in 1944
Canon Point: during the fight with the Captain while Major rolls up in his zeppelin like a baws
Notes: Walter is... very quiet. He doesn't tag around posts much since he's such a secluded character -- and it doesn't help the past month had Abel heavily involved in plots where Walter was not! But I plan to get him out more. Any thoughts on how to get the butler socializing would be great! (I also want to note an apology on the slowness in tagging at times; SOMETIMES MY BRAIN JUST DOESN'T WANT TO SOUND FANCY AND INTELLIGENT LKJSF I am so sorry. I am working on it, I promise. /watches OVA's 4298098234 times)
Specific Crit Requests: The most important thing to me is that he comes across as a dignified British gent, and his voice clear, unique. If you think I'm faltering/failing or have any pointers to those ends, please shoot 'em at me!

P.S. -(Not including Guts here, as he's BRAND NEW, but you can hit up his HMD on his journal if you'd like!)

ETA: ALSO flksjdf if you have any... AMUSING IDEAS for how to KO Abel for his canon bump? I AM ALL OVER THAT. It must be amazing.

[senri.livejournal.com]

Rin Asano→payback

Anything you've got, really. I benched her for most of Slenderman plot and she's actually still asleep; she's been having kind of a rough time lately and I'm a little concerned about that, although she got into a somewhat better state of mind around Christmas.

Tyki Mikk→phaseshifts

Mostly balancing his dark and light sides, playing his faily parts while putting in the inhuman and awful parts of him is what concerns me. What appears in him tends to depend on who he's with. What do you think of him?

Kanaya Maryam→unironically

My newest! Most concerned about her speech pattern (lol trolls) and nascent attempts at sarcasm and irony. Is she doing that enough? I don't know if I'm bringing out that side of her well. (Also, if you'd like to avoid tagging with her, a permissions post is in her journal!

[matchmaker.livejournal.com]

Buffy the Vampire Slayer/Angel: Angel - protects
Loss: His big boy brooding pants.
Canon Point: Post "Provider."
Notes: I don't really have any, I don't think. NEVERMIND, I THOUGHT OF SOMETHING. He wasn't around much during the Slenderman plot, which I think is very out of character for him but the thread I tagged into kind of died before they went anywhere due to Barbara Gordon's player dropping. Plus, I was honestly kind of lost by all of the posts with evidence and stuff. Complete fail on my part, I know. But I thought I should mention this because I am aware of how un-Angellike it is.
Specific Crit Requests: DOES HE SUCK?

Xena: Warrior Princess/Hercules: The Legendary Journeys/Young Hercules: Ares - murderous
Loss: Rabu rabu for Xena.
Canon Point: Post "The Quill is Mightier"/mid "Armageddon Now part 1."
Notes: Needs to be less indifferent/more actively villainous amirite.
Specific Crit Requests: Same as above.

Xena: Warrior Princess/Hercules: The Legendary Journeys: Cupid - matchmaker
Loss: His waifu-chan. D:
Canon Point: Post "A Comedy of Eros."
Notes: Need to be more active with him hnngh.
Specific Crit Requests: Again, whatever you got for me.

[endthem.livejournal.com]

Stress-levels are high and time is short right now. I am aware that my activity and tagging consistency is spotty at best. I am hanging onto the hope that this will be changing soon once I get into the swing of my insane new job, and cut down on my character count. Just bear with me until then? \o/

Billy (Dr. Horrible) | Dr. Horrible's Sing-Along Blog | need_to_rule_it | Private HMD (http://need-to-rule-it.livejournal.com/1342.html)
Loss: The ability to make or design weapons
Stuff: Billy is due for a serious shaking-up to get him out of the weird rut he's in. I'm struggling the most with him, but am hanging onto the hope that I can pull him out, as soon as I can think clearly enough to run a certain loss. Any further advice or thoughts are appreciated.

Faye Valentine | Cowboy Bebop | luckyvalentine | Private HMD (http://luckyvalentine.livejournal.com/1496.html)
Loss: The memories that she gains near the end of the series.
Stuff: Things have changed a little recently with Faye! lol Any thoughts on her character would be loved. Are people still alright with her, at least entertained by her?

Legato Bluesummers | Trigun | endthem | Private HMD (http://endthem.livejournal.com/327.html)
Loss: Memories of Knives
Stuff: So... Legato has his hands in a lot, is making contacts, but I'm always desperate for crit on him. He's not a social character, and he doesn't seem to attract much new CR when I do open posts with him, but does it seem like there is more I could be doing to get him interacting with people outside of his 'friends?' Are people getting sick of his creeperishness? Does anyone have any sort of problem with him at all?

Prince Zuko | Avatar: The Last Airbender | honorinflames |
Loss: Memories of Mai
Stuff: He was suffering and floundering for a while there when Iroh kind of idled, a bunch of his budding CR left, and he was hard to play because of it. I'm hoping that with my lighter character load, and with Iroh definitely gone now, I can give him the attention he deserves and get him worked back into things. So... any advice beyond that? Are people still interested in him? Anyone have any gripes with anything I've been doing with him so far? etc.


It breaks my heart, but The Weighted Companion Cube and Sakaki will be leaving soon, once I wrap up a few loose ends. I love them to death, but I need to cut down on my character count with the new job, and any comments or thoughts on them are still welcome.

[dusk.livejournal.com]

[gottaknockhard.livejournal.com]

Cowboy Bebop: Spike Spiegel - gottaknockhard
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here (http://gottaknockhard.livejournal.com/679.html)
Loss: Memories of Julia
Canon Point: Post-Series
Notes: He wasn't around much for the Slender-plot, so I've been a little worried about his level of involvement when it comes to game-wide plots. I try not to overdo it or push for what might be unrealistic, but I also don't want to look closed off to CR because of that. And... he's been making a lot of mistakes and getting less comfortable with things he was pretty apathetic about before. Hopefully it all seems IC and not too fail for the sake of failing! I feel like I should balance more, but it's been a lot of rolling with the punches. I'm always open to suggestions or things you'd like to see more of...!
Specific Crit Requests: Anything at all!

ETA! I wanted to note that I'm sorry for the super slow tagging this past month! I've been running on really low energy after work, so I haven't been branching out very much. I hope it hasn't been too frustrating. After this month it should even out.

[psych0p0mps]

ARADIA MEGIDO		IVAN
Homestuck		Golden Sun
Canon Point: Current Loss: Innate resistance to mind control		Canon Point: Post-TLA Loss: Memories of Isaac

For Aradia, what she does and doesn't know, along with her objectives, are kind of vague right now. So in playing her, I'm kind of wavering back and forth between the fun-loving girl determined to make something great of her new life, and the long-doomed girl struggling with both her old fatalism and her new uncertainty. I hope I am balancing these two sides of her well enough.
Also, I'd like to hear from the Homestuck cast on what you think of her relationship with your character. AM I DOIN IT RITE?

As for Ivan, I... I'm worried he's a little bland? I mean, it makes his interactions with wacky characters fun, but he doesn't take much initiative or risks, or start anything, or fkdalsfks. I-is there anything you think he should be doing that he's not? Do you like him in spite of the blandness? Heck, am I wrong and he's not bland? I-idek.

[neutraltwin.livejournal.com]

[grotesques.livejournal.com]

so uhh.... hi.

i've gotten crit about needing to get out there and tag more, so i'm trying to work on that with certain characters. i've also gotten crit about Julian getting more consequences for his actions, so i've been working on that with my CR too. but is there anything you want me specifically to work on? like, getting better at back-tagging, not apping and dropping, etc. character-wise especially?

i want to improve.... /wheezes

[azure-guardian.livejournal.com]

.Hack//G.U: Azure Flame Kite - [Bad username or site: @ livejournal.com]
Link to HMD: On journal
Loss: All memories and knowledge of Aura
Canon Point: Post Reminisce
Notes: Kite's starting to develop his own personality - one that's different than the orginal's. In this case, I'm trying to balence out him being a derp AI and the creepy zombie AI that he is without too much depression in the middle.
Specific Crit Requests: Anything you can come up with!


SMT: Devil Survivor: Kaito Tsukanda - [Bad username or site: @ livejournal.com]
Link to HMD: On journal.
Loss: The knowledge he picked to control the Demons on Day 6.
Canon Point: Post boss fight with Naoya, on Atsuro's Route.
Notes: My newest character. I don't have any plans set in stone with Kaito right now and he hasn't interracted with a lot of characters yet.
Specific Crit Requests: Anything you can come up with~


Boktai 2: Solar Boy Django: Dainn - [Bad username or site: @ livejournal.com]
Link to HMD: On journal.
Loss: Memories of his sisters.
Canon Point: Post game, right after his death.
Notes: Dainn is a massive troll and it's quite difficult for him to meet people because he's an utter creep. I would like him to meet the bad guys of the castle though.
Specific Crit Requests: Anything you can come up with~