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HOW'S MY DRIVING?

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It is omg.

SRS BZNS I think Riful and Alexstrasza acted great during Slenderplot. I like especially that Alexstrasza used the journal, which was clearly a big eye sore for her since it is a castle creation. And it was refreshing to see Riful be caring in a very creepy way and even have the castle get to her for once.

I'm glad to hear this--and want to apologize for totally dropping the ball on getting her out there ): I wound up picking up a ton of 8-hour shifts that left me with nothing leftover to brain with.

Have any suggestions for them on what they should look for? Maybe some names that is a closer match?

It's all right, darling. I know how it is to work and then be like ".......... /brain is mush" after so many long shifts. ♥

Tales of Symphonia: Yuan Ka-Fai -

cloakand_danger
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here
Loss: Angelic powers
Canon Point: Just after the Scene At Altessa's (game canon only)
Notes: Been here 3+ years, so he's changed quite a bit in that time. Also, I totally plan to get a post up about Joshua/the Peace Patrol sometime today or tomorrow, I just got bit by a lack-of-motivation bug.
Specific Crit Requests: I can't think of anything in particular...

if you have any suggestions for more appropriate/better PBs, please, let me know. i'm all ears.

but the fact of the matter is, PBs are still personal preference in the end. Lambert was honestly a joke that went awry and that i actually considered changing (because who wants him as a PB), but didn't bother because it took too much work to find another, and Ellen Page was spontaneous and something fandom suggested.

while you may not think that they look like the characters, again, some other people do. but i'm willing to change them if you have better suggestions or stop using them completely if they bother you that much (minding PBs or not).

Doctrine of Labyrinths: Felix Harrowgate -

lord_wizard
Loss: The Syblline
Canon Point: Between book 3 and 4
Notes: Time in Paradisa - 4 months. He's pretty active still, and I am no where near done with the Chimera stuff. I want to prod the members more, but don't want to be invasive.
Specific Crit Requests:
Felix is a very complex character. So complex that even I still can't comprehend a lot of what he does in canon. I've come to the realization that the information I provided for his personality in his app is, while still true, not necessarily accurate. And as the author herself has said, the only thing that really saves Felix from being a total Mary Sue is that he's an asshole. And you might have noticed he doesn't come off this way. Too me though, this isn't entirely true, and also it's hard to be an asshole to people you don't know, especially when he also badly wants people to like him, and it's a delicate balance to strike. So I'm slowly building up his CR circle so I promptly break it down (or try to. People here are stubborn). Given that info, or if ANYONE knows his canon and has crit on how I play Felix, please let me know.

Angel the Series: Lilah Morgan-

buryyoualive
Loss: If someone asks her about her evil plots, she will be compelled to spill the beans about them.
Canon Point: Post 4x01, "Deep Down"
Notes: I know I need to get her out and interacting outside of her canonmates (especially Wesley...) a little more. Part of this was my issue, as I was feeling iffy on her voice at first, but as I play her more, I've definitely grown more comfortable, so hopefully that'll change. Specifically, I'd like her to meet more like minded people she could possibly plot with..as she's a little lost, direction wise, without Wolfram and Hart to rely on.
Specific Crit Requests: Anything!

Edited 2011-03-12 21:11 (UTC)

you are very good with your characters and their voices when you are around. however at this point it does seem like you really should look at your load closely and consider letting someone go. you really seem to be spreading yourself too thin and I feel like from an outside perspective it seems like your characters have in some ways withdrawn to prioritizing castmates above everyone else when they thread, which is sad because it lets some cr that worked hard to stick with you before those castmates arrived fall to the backburner and those people deserve good amounts of attention too.

you seem to have casts popping up on every side now so I see how it might be hard to decide to bow out with someone, but I think it would help you and allow you to make a better commitment to the game and building cr with the characters you had leftover.

)8 it is very tragic kjsdkgsg

I can't offer much for the others, but you really don't need to worry about getting Booth's voice wrong. I love the show, and I love reading Booth's posts because I can hear his voice so well. Especially when he's tagging back and forth with Bones, but the rest of the time, too, he makes me smile when I stalk him because he's just like he always was, just...learning to cope with the whole 'magical castle' thing.

I'm really enjoying Aradia so far. She might be kind of a mysterious character right now, but what we've seen of her God Tier self and her character while she was alive, you've been doing a great job capturing what makes her appealing: the vivacity and energy. And Kanaya might develop a redrom crush here, ooh, careful.

I do think that you should continue playing things kind of close to the chest with her, a benevolent figure but one who keeps things a little foggy perhaps on purpose for the others. With the Maid of Time you actually have a good IC justification for this too that you can swing, that if they get out of this with memories intact she won't have caused any doomed timelines inadvertently.

Really, I think you should just keep it up. ♥

Persona 3: Pharos -

bedninja
Link to HMD: Individual HMD Post Here
Loss: His ability to "know death".
Canon Point: November 4th, just after his departure.
Notes: I know I kind of disappeared for a little while there, and I'm sorry about that; but I'm back into things now and don't plan to let that happen again!
Specific Crit Requests: Anything and everything! I... tend to use a lot of headcanon with this kid, so if you've had any problems with this in the past or anything else, please let me know!

different anon. i wasn't going to say anything at first because i didn't want to +1 you to death but you are taking this crit like a child. your receptiveness to crit aside, i'll keep *my* crit in line with what's been posted here and not elsewhere.

i have to agree with the original anon regarding your use of pbs. i don't think they are a good representation of either character. i actively avoid your characters because of them, so it is a much bigger deal than you may think. using them is your personal choice, but you need to realize that not everyone enjoys them. by not using them the problem is solved, otherwise it's just a problem that you are going to have realize exists by choosing to do so.

as far as your receptiveness to crit, if you can't handle the fact that someone is going to have critique that you might not like or agree with then i suggest simply abstaining from posting on here in the future.

My only crit here is just on activity--characterization is just fine and dandy!

What I do worry about is how hard it can be to develop CR with your characters when they don't appear to tag around much, and I often see tags that are delayed anywhere from 18-36 hours. Backtagging I'm totally okay with and all, but when tags take 3 days without warning it gets hard to still feel invested in the thread, or feel like it will go anywhere that's worth waiting a week and a half to find it dropped ):

Posting-wise you're fine...I just worry about tags. I know RL is a factor and all that, and I have seen your plurks about it so I can understand that. I just wanted to bring it to your attention ;;

I really hope you decide to try just canon updating Cassie before dropping her because I'd be really sad if you did :( /cilngs to. This is ... zero helpfulness but I felt the need to give input.

Dude Claire is one of the biggest reasons I want to keep her, because I really like Claire and Cassie's CR ;_; I'm going to try very very hard to fix this before I give up, even if it takes a bump or a major canon review or something.

???

Take a step back. Take a break. Then re-read things carefully with another perspective. I don't see the person as acting like a child. They said sorry, and they are willing to take suggestions.

Sobs yaaaay hopefully a canon bump and review is just what the doctor ordered, because they really are some of my favorite CR and losing her would make me wibbly, even if it meant more Damian and Clark time by default.

	Series \| Smallville Canon Point \| 10x11 Loss \| Memories of Chloe Sullivan (her cousin) HMD Post \| Here, screened + anon available Use for ANY character :3 Time in Paradisa \| 6 months Wiki Page \| Here Character Relations Chart \| Very in need of updating, but here Concerns \| I would love feedback on the Isis plot (in terms of IC & OOC) I refrained from giving her a huge role in the Slenderman research b/c I want to be careful not to let her dominate the research scene, especially on topics she's not knowledgeable about. I'm hoping this didn't come off as her not getting very involved - I tried to strike a balance, but I'm not sure I succeeded this time. Also, how am I doing on maintaining CR with her? Lois has a wide CR net, and I want to make sure your character is getting the attention they think they deserve if they're close to her. LOIS LANE \| loisfuckinglane
	Canon \| Star Wars Canon Point \| End of The Empire Strikes Back Loss \| Inconvenient bouts of honesty Time in Paradisa \| 3 months Wiki Page \| Here Character Relations Chart \| Here Concerns \| If Han's felt a little sparse, it's for 2 primary reasons: 1) I've still been backlogging with him all the way back to his 2nd post, keeping some threads going for a couple months even. 2) I've had a hard time figuring out what to do with him. I feel generally comfortable with his voice now (feel free to disagree if you don't feel it's IC!), but I have a difficult time figuring out what to have him do with his time here. :( I'm really trying to work at it, as I don't want to drop him, so hopefully building him more CR will help...? HAN SOLO \| hanfreakingsolo
	Canon \| X-Men films Canon Point \| Directly after Phoenix throws him into a wall in X3 Loss \| Memories of Rogue Time in Paradisa \| Almost 2 weeks Wiki Page \| Here Character Relations Chart \| Here Concerns \| Logan's a brand new voice for me, so more than anything, I'd appreciate feedback on his voice/whether his actions are IC/etc. It's a game largely based around conversations with others, and Logan's a man of few words, so I want to make sure I'm not going overboard to compensate. Also, feedback on canonmate interaction thus far would be great. They're from a different universe but I still want Logan's reactions to them to make sense. He's been focused lately on getting to know the X-kids and assess their situation: and he's not above making things messy on purpose in order to do so. LOGAN / "WOLVERINE" \| slicesanddices

Edited 2011-03-12 21:25 (UTC)

as far as you see here, yes. you're right. i was factoring in more than just that.

Loss | Her mind
Time in Paradisa | About 6 months
Wiki Page | Here
Contact | Plurk > ardendactyl AIM > thegreatmuldini
Concerns | Am I approachable as a mun? Do you feel like I'm open to plot with, etc.? Do I follow through well or leave you hanging? How's my activity? Balancing 3 characters here is new for me and I am trying to see how it goes. Do I have a good variety of characters/plots/posts/CR/etc.? Do you have concerns about my behavior OOC?

ARDEN |

dancinpenguins

Edited 2011-03-12 21:29 (UTC)

TRON: Kevin Flynn -

arcade_god
Link to HMD: HMD (http://arcade-god.livejournal.com/799.html)
Loss: his identity disc
Canon Point: a few cycles after CLU's betrayal
Notes: Brand new, so I dunno if anybody actually has anything to say at this point. So far I haven't branched out much, as a new player, but I hope to take care of that in the future.
Specific Crit Requests: Pretty much anything. I've seen plenty of badly-played Flynns around, so it would be nice to know if I have a decent grasp of his (pre-Legacy) voice.

Edited 2011-03-12 23:04 (UTC)

i've already agreed to not use them all together if it bothers that many people. i wasn't aware that it was this much a problem, but again, i'll stop using them all together and i'm sorry that my PB choice wasn't to your liking.

and i'm fully aware of how much of a child that i've been acting like, and i fully apologize for it and how much of an ass i've been making of myself. i completely regret it and in the future i will abstain from posting to HMD until i know i can handle it.

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