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[paradisamods]

VIDEO GAME APPLICATIONS ☆
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If you wish to apply for a character from any video game fandom ( i.e. Final Fantasy, Kingdom Hearts, Resident Evil, etc. ), then please copy and paste the form in the box below into a new comment to this post. Your application will be screened to prevent others from seeing it. A mod or helper will reply to it in a timely fashion.

If you are applying for a character you reserved recently, please put 'Reserved Character - ( Character Name )' on the subject line.

If your application does not fit into one comment, split your application into as many comments are needed. You can mark them as part 1, part 2, etc if you feel the need.

Please space your paragraphs properly; improper spacing may be grounds for a decline over writing quality.

<b>NAME:</b> [ Your name or nickname. ] <b>JOURNAL:</b> [ This is your personal journal, not your character's journal. ] <b>EMAIL:</b> [ Provide an e-mail address at which the mods and your fellow players may reliably reach you if necessary. This is REQUIRED. ] <b>AIM:</b> [ Provide an AOL Instant Messenger screen name at which you may be contacted. This is optional, but can be good for plotting and role playing out scenes. ] <b>WIKI NAME:</b> [ Username on the wiki, if applicable. ] <b>CHARACTERS:</b> [ List all the characters you have as of now, if applicable. We will review your activity before considering your application. ] <b>CHARACTER NAME:</b> [ Self-explanatory, yes? ] <b>FANDOM:</b> [ Where are they from? ] <b>CANON:</b> [ After which point in their canon storyline does the character enter Paradisa? ] <b>WHAT THEY LOST:</b> [ Provide a realistic loss for your character that will affect them in some distinct fashion, and explain why it is important to them] <B>ABOUT THE CHARACTER:</b> [ Provide a couple of paragraphs about the character you're applying for. Make sure to cover all that is relevant; their personality, their background. THIS MUST BE 500 WORDS or longer. But keep in mind that we do read these so have it be concise and work for quality, not quantity. It'll be a great measure of your characterization and understanding of the character. For a more detailed version of what we're looking for, please see <a href=http://paradisa.wikia.com/wiki/What_We%27re_Looking_For_On_Applications#Tips_on_Writing_Good_Character_Descriptions>What We're Looking For.</a> ] <b>ABILITIES:</b> [ Provide a decent explanation of the general abilities your character can use. Links are welcome here if the character has too many abilities to expand on here, but we want to get a good feel for what your character is capable of. If your character has no powers, leave this section blank.] <b>THIRD-PERSON WRITING SAMPLE:</b> [ Write a couple of paragraphs in third person of your character doing something. Anything. Eating dinner. Fighting their archenemy. Showing up in Paradisa. Whatever. THIS MUST BE 250 WORDS OR LONGER. It's used as a measure of your characterization and writing ability.] <b>FIRST-PERSON WRITING SAMPLE: </b> [ This should be in first person, as if the character were making an entry in their journal. It MUST be five sentences or longer and should show that you have a grasp of the character's unique voice.] <b>INTENT: </b> [ What draws you to play this particular character? Ideally, what would you like to do with the character in Paradisa? It's alright if you don't know yet; we're just curious. ]

Typical staff for the section: Ashley, Valerie

Comments

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

REVISE

[paradisamods]

You have a fine grasp on his background, but if you could, expand a little more on his personality in the About the Character section. Also, please provide a second third person sample so we can get a little more insight on his voice.

Thank you.

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

REVISE

[paradisamods]

Apologies for the delay! At this time we would like to request a revised 3rd-person sample as it is hard to get a grasp of your handle on characterization from the sample provided. We would also like a revised 1st-person sample as there are many grammatical errors present (punctuation "..", capitalization "Is.. it").

Thanks!

REVISE

[paradisamods]

At this time we would like to request a revise application as the "about the character" and samples provided make it hard to get a feel for your understanding of the character, and we feel more could be said about them in the "about" section. In addition to this the application has several grammatical errors (comma splices, punctuation) that make it harder to read.

Also, can you elaborate on the abilities section? Specifically the "by himself" bit--do his abilities change depending on canonmates?

Thank-you!

REVISE

[paradisamods]

At this time we would like to request an additional 3rd-person sample to better help us gauge characterization!

Additionally, looking at his loss (which is fine by the way!): just a note that things such as terminal illnesses and diseases, curses etc do not progress while in Paradisa. They would remain in the same state of illness from arrival to departure with no progression or worsening of symptoms. A more expanded explanation is here!

With this knowledge would you still like to keep your current proposed loss for this character?

REVISE

[paradisamods]

At this time we would like to request revised samples as those provided did not give us a firm impression of your handle character on characterization. Thank-you!

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

REVISE

[paradisamods]

Welcome back!

We would like a bit more specification on how you will be "nerfing" his abilities, as well as a list of what abilities he is capable of in the "Abilities" section. (The "Abilities" section may have been added to the application process after your first time applying here.)

REVISE

[paradisamods]

At this time we would like to request revised samples as those provided were riddled with comma splices, making them hard to read. You don't need to redo them, but please touch them up :) Thanks!

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

DECLINED

[paradisamods]

We're sorry, but this application has been declined. Upon review of canon and taking into account the very limited amount of screen time/dialogue this character has, there just isn't enough to accept an application for them. Too much of it would need to be headcanon.

We apologize for the inconvenience. You may apply for another character at a later time.

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

REVISE

[paradisamods]

At this time we would like to request an additional 1st-person sample to help us gauge your handle on characterization. Thanks!

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

REVISE

[paradisamods]

At this time we would like to request a revised "about the character" section and revised samples to help us get a better understanding of your handle on characterization and personality.

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc and paradisabeyond. Also, if you aren't already listed under the contact list, then please comment here after registering. Thank you!

APPROVED

[paradisamods]

Your application has been approved. Go ahead and create your character journal, then comment on this entry and join paradisa, paradisalogs, paradisaooc, paradisawatch and paradisabeyond. Optionally, you can also join yuuyuupandaland, Paradisa's crack/meme comm. Also, if you aren't already listed under the wiki's Contact List, then please comment here after registering. Thank you.