Hi, I don't know Anri at all so I can't really discuss her at all. I do have some things on Rhyme though. I don't mean to attack you as a person or player so I apologize in advance if things come off as harsh.
My main thing is that Rhyme can come off as very... flat sometimes. I know she's a mature, sedate young girl, but sometimes it seems like she doesn't really react to what characters are doing to her in a thread - young girls can certainly be contained, calm and collected, but Rhyme can get annoyed too, excited, even a bit angry (even if she controls these emotions!). Controlling them doesn't mean she's not feeling them. And showing them in a thread doesn't mean giving her dramatic outbursts - you can play emotions more subtly than that. Biting her lip, displaying worry or downcast features, or even just leaving a conversation more abruptly than she normally would if a character is rude, all of that kind of stuff makes her more expressive. I'm thinking particularly of her threads with characters like Zim in this case. He is really outright rude and belittling of her and she might not hold it against him as a major grudge but I doubt Rhyme would put up with that kind of treatment either.
Secondly, in events like the pirate plot, Rhyme might be a mature young girl but she's still a little girl - I'd put her as thirteen at the MOST, probably more like 11 or 12 in game, as kind of the point of her character is that she's quite young but very mature for her age. At any rate, during the pirate plot, Rhyme acted like she was 20 and had seen it all before, not like a bright, curious girl exposed to something new. Again, being sedate doesn't mean she should never express enthusiasm or curiosity for things or even get herself into a little trouble. I guess I would like to see more emotion out of her than simple pleasantness. She doesn't have to have emotional outbursts, but she does have feelings.
Lastly, I question why you'd choose to involve her in things like the Riful plot, especially when Dolly specifically specified that no children should be allowed. That's a seriously traumatic event, and is going to stress out characters beyond Rhyme's most immediate CR just because she is so young and vulnerable. Why do you want to do this with her character?
On not so much a crit front, I noticed you haven't filled up all her icon spaces and wondered if it was because you have trouble finding images to fill her spaces. I have a Rhyme account with icons here (http://www.livejournal.com/allpics.bml?user=barfs-rainbows) and links to the comms where I found them, if you wanted more of a selection!
Anyway I am glad you are enjoying the game and it's fun to see your girls around, especially since Rhyme is such a rarely-played character, and I hope none of the above points come across too harsh.
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My main thing is that Rhyme can come off as very... flat sometimes. I know she's a mature, sedate young girl, but sometimes it seems like she doesn't really react to what characters are doing to her in a thread - young girls can certainly be contained, calm and collected, but Rhyme can get annoyed too, excited, even a bit angry (even if she controls these emotions!). Controlling them doesn't mean she's not feeling them. And showing them in a thread doesn't mean giving her dramatic outbursts - you can play emotions more subtly than that. Biting her lip, displaying worry or downcast features, or even just leaving a conversation more abruptly than she normally would if a character is rude, all of that kind of stuff makes her more expressive. I'm thinking particularly of her threads with characters like Zim in this case. He is really outright rude and belittling of her and she might not hold it against him as a major grudge but I doubt Rhyme would put up with that kind of treatment either.
Secondly, in events like the pirate plot, Rhyme might be a mature young girl but she's still a little girl - I'd put her as thirteen at the MOST, probably more like 11 or 12 in game, as kind of the point of her character is that she's quite young but very mature for her age. At any rate, during the pirate plot, Rhyme acted like she was 20 and had seen it all before, not like a bright, curious girl exposed to something new. Again, being sedate doesn't mean she should never express enthusiasm or curiosity for things or even get herself into a little trouble. I guess I would like to see more emotion out of her than simple pleasantness. She doesn't have to have emotional outbursts, but she does have feelings.
Lastly, I question why you'd choose to involve her in things like the Riful plot, especially when Dolly specifically specified that no children should be allowed. That's a seriously traumatic event, and is going to stress out characters beyond Rhyme's most immediate CR just because she is so young and vulnerable. Why do you want to do this with her character?
On not so much a crit front, I noticed you haven't filled up all her icon spaces and wondered if it was because you have trouble finding images to fill her spaces. I have a Rhyme account with icons here (http://www.livejournal.com/allpics.bml?user=barfs-rainbows) and links to the comms where I found them, if you wanted more of a selection!
Anyway I am glad you are enjoying the game and it's fun to see your girls around, especially since Rhyme is such a rarely-played character, and I hope none of the above points come across too harsh.