Red vs. Blue: Michael J. Caboose - notmyfaultwall Loss: His super strength Canon Point: Revelation: Chapter 20 Notes: I know he’s really, really new, but anything you can throw my way’s appreciated! Specific Crit Requests: Caboose’s speech patterns sound really strange. There are random pauses, and sometimes there are full stops in the middle of his sentences. Am I doing a good job of portraying that?
Also, do you prefer. The full stops. Or do you like, the short, pauses, instead? Or. Does it work best. As, a joint thing?
Alsosometimeshespeedsuphisspeech. Is that annoying? Should I just put [said very quickly] instead?
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Loss: His super strength
Canon Point: Revelation: Chapter 20
Notes: I know he’s really, really new, but anything you can throw my way’s appreciated!
Specific Crit Requests: Caboose’s speech patterns sound really strange. There are random pauses, and sometimes there are full stops in the middle of his sentences. Am I doing a good job of portraying that?
Also, do you prefer. The full stops. Or do you like, the short, pauses, instead? Or. Does it work best. As, a joint thing?
Alsosometimeshespeedsuphisspeech. Is that annoying? Should I just put [said very quickly] instead?